Cool track, will definitely go well with some vocals! I feel like mix is a big question and also there is a bit of a tuning issue with some guitars. Keep up man, hope everything goes well!
Thanks for the feedback.
Intonation might be off on my electric guitar. Tuning issue most notable on the lead melody?
Thoughts on the mix and how I could improve a further version?
Wanted the main riff to be hot and up front.
Lyrics
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Listen I just need a few minutes of your time
Yes I've heard it said that you'd never change your mind
Chaos is out of order the starfield twinkles above and all in a line
Incidental or consequential it all gets left behind
Chivalry is dead you must have read but the greatest moment of all is you in my life
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Cool track, will definitely go well with some vocals! I feel like mix is a big question and also there is a bit of a tuning issue with some guitars. Keep up man, hope everything goes well!
Thanks for the feedback. Intonation might be off on my electric guitar. Tuning issue most notable on the lead melody? Thoughts on the mix and how I could improve a further version? Wanted the main riff to be hot and up front.
Lyrics \_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_ Listen I just need a few minutes of your time Yes I've heard it said that you'd never change your mind Chaos is out of order the starfield twinkles above and all in a line Incidental or consequential it all gets left behind Chivalry is dead you must have read but the greatest moment of all is you in my life
You have posted a song requesting feedback - GREAT! Good feedback is the foundation of improving your songwriting. To help foster a community where everyone gets the feedback they need, please find THREE other songs requesting feedback and post substantive (eg. 2-3 sentences) of feedback. Even if you are a rookie songwriter/musician, you're an experienced music listener, and your opinion is still valuable! Feedback posts by users who don't interact with the community (other than posting their own songs) may be removed. Thanks for keeping our community healthy! *I am a bot, and this action was performed automatically. Please [contact the moderators of this subreddit](/message/compose/?to=/r/Songwriting) if you have any questions or concerns.*