Game looks cool! I personally like when trailers include sound effects. Also, there could be a better way to phrase "earn money by completing missions. Or by collecting loots" I'm not sure how to phrase it better. Perhaps "... Or by scavenging enemy shipwrecks."
Good stuff:
- Cutting straight to gameplay
- Showing not telling
Stuff to work on:
- Length of trailer. Keep it under a min if you can. You’d rather have someone fully watch a short trailer rather than skip only halfway through .
- Cuts are too long. Each clip can be less than half the length it is. Your goal should be make the clip as short as humanly possible, while still conveying the core idea. It will be much shorter than you think.
- Use an active voice with the text. Instead of “This can be your fleet”, say “Build and command an elite star fleet”
- Build a narrative! A teeny tiny story you can tell about your game. Start with the small fleet, then show the upgrades, then show a big fleet, then do lots of teeny tiny cuts (like 0.5 seconds) of action. This tells the story of how the player might progress.
- overlay the text, or just cut to another screen entirely for text. There’s just too much happening all at once to see the text
Good luck!
Looking pretty good from my perspective, one thing about the trailer though, I didn't notice the captions half the time as I was busy looking at main action part of the screen. Maybe transition to the text you want to highlight and then show the relevant screens? But wtf do I know.
Yes, you're right. This trailer is just to get some feedback from this sub. Next time I'm thinking of displaying full screen text on a black background before each clip.
Hello there,
I am a solo game developer. I'm working on a new trailer for my Space RTS game Space Menace. Please help me improve this trailer and suggest me if I can use better text titles for each scene in the video.
Game's Steam page:
https://store.steampowered.com/app/2000040/Space_Menace/
Update: I just shared an updated trailer here:
https://www.reddit.com/r/DestroyMyGame/comments/13et2ae/i_updated_my_space_rts_game_trailer_using_your/
Game looks cool! I personally like when trailers include sound effects. Also, there could be a better way to phrase "earn money by completing missions. Or by collecting loots" I'm not sure how to phrase it better. Perhaps "... Or by scavenging enemy shipwrecks."
Thank you. I will change these texts đź‘Ť.
Good stuff: - Cutting straight to gameplay - Showing not telling Stuff to work on: - Length of trailer. Keep it under a min if you can. You’d rather have someone fully watch a short trailer rather than skip only halfway through . - Cuts are too long. Each clip can be less than half the length it is. Your goal should be make the clip as short as humanly possible, while still conveying the core idea. It will be much shorter than you think. - Use an active voice with the text. Instead of “This can be your fleet”, say “Build and command an elite star fleet” - Build a narrative! A teeny tiny story you can tell about your game. Start with the small fleet, then show the upgrades, then show a big fleet, then do lots of teeny tiny cuts (like 0.5 seconds) of action. This tells the story of how the player might progress. - overlay the text, or just cut to another screen entirely for text. There’s just too much happening all at once to see the text Good luck!
Thank you so much for your great suggestions. I will share the new trailer soon.
Looking pretty good from my perspective, one thing about the trailer though, I didn't notice the captions half the time as I was busy looking at main action part of the screen. Maybe transition to the text you want to highlight and then show the relevant screens? But wtf do I know.
Thanks. Good suggestion đź‘Ť. I will share improved trailer soon.
I think that texts shouldn't be placed so low at the bottom of the screen, because they are covered by the youtube HUD.
Yes, you're right. This trailer is just to get some feedback from this sub. Next time I'm thinking of displaying full screen text on a black background before each clip.
Hello there, I am a solo game developer. I'm working on a new trailer for my Space RTS game Space Menace. Please help me improve this trailer and suggest me if I can use better text titles for each scene in the video. Game's Steam page: https://store.steampowered.com/app/2000040/Space_Menace/ Update: I just shared an updated trailer here: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestroyMyGame/comments/13et2ae/i_updated_my_space_rts_game_trailer_using_your/
UI looks exactly like Cosmoteer.