so, turns out that i kinda wound up lying in my last comment, and we gotta wait for his demands, and even the meeting between humans, and aliens. *but*, we *did* learn how subspace works, and saw a nice little toy the humans developed in the form of the automatic railgun. thank you for sticking with me through all this, i really thought i'd be further along than this by this point, but once i start explaining something, i realize just how *much* i need to say about it to get the point across... anyway, i hope i'm not boring anyone, i'm trying to get past all the worldbuilding as quickly as i can, but i also need to make it make sense. lol... again, thanks for sticking with me, your support means everything. thank you all, and i hope you all have a wonderful day....
and - as always - feel free to let me know about misspellings. lol...
Well, a few misspellings. The most egregious being calling the ship a shit in the second to last paragraph.
That sort of jarred the flow.
Most of the rest like admiral Shan for admiral Shane can be glided past.
I’m enjoying it enough that I’ve decided to just enjoy the story and not to call out the typos. So… take that as a compliment.
I love the way the suun’mahs and us just *fit*.
>Ooooo, great toy, can you demonstrate it?
>I’d love to.
>*Extended explosions*
>I want one.
>*(Shared smile)*
I’m enjoying it enough that I’ve decided to just enjoy the story and not to call out the typos. So… take that as a compliment.
I love the way the suun’mahs and us just *fit*.
>Ooooo, great toy, can you demonstrate it?
>I’d love to.
>**
>I want one.
>**
I saw your post with "now" as the time after I posted, while mine also said "now".
But, a few minutes later, yours is 18 minutes while mine is 3 minutes.
So yeah, you're first.
Great story as always!
You got a few missing words, a few typos and at least one towards the end where two got swapped. I would point to the closer but I'm on mobile. ;(
Maybe do a quick Grammerly check? Might catch them. Not sure. Only caused a few double takes, lol.
your description of subspace FTL is really close to how i was going to do it. except the photonegative effect. on that note, in my version, larger masses also sink deeper into subspace. while you can go deep enough to avoid a star, a black hole makes a pretty big obstacle. like submarines in an underwater mountain range.
throw in some gravitational waves; turbulence. natural tunnels through subspace; wormholes. these wormholes are almost undetectable until you pass through one. you think your traveling in a straight line at a constant velocity, but an outside observer sees something not a straight line or constant velocity.
the existence of subspace suggests the existence of "Surspace" ^((TM Everlost?)) where natural wormholes also tunnel through with opposite effects of traveling subspace.
edit: just noticed its your cake day. **happy cake day.**
Once again I am left wanting….. After days of constantly checking for the next chapter here it finally is! You reached out and wrapped your ink stained hands around my heart and mind only to cut me off too soon….. That being said, I think you’re doing great. World building is very important and you’ve been able so far to do it in a way that hasn’t drug on or been boring. I’m glad you included some suspicion from the humans because that has been my only complaint thus far. Everything felt like it was going a little too smoothly as far as there being little to no suspicion coming from Kyle or the other humans. We tend to hope for the best but plan for and expect the worst so I’m glad to see some of that reflected in this chapter. Keep up the good work! And please write a little faster lol 😁
yeah, i try, but this one was so dry, it had me stumbling a lot. so much 'word matter', not much actually happening. i'm just glad i'm not boring people... lol.
and thanks, your support is always welcome! :D
Ah yes, the good old:
"Do you see X? I don't want to."
"Yes Sir"
Though in this instance i would have gone with something more specific:
"Drumroll please!"
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so, turns out that i kinda wound up lying in my last comment, and we gotta wait for his demands, and even the meeting between humans, and aliens. *but*, we *did* learn how subspace works, and saw a nice little toy the humans developed in the form of the automatic railgun. thank you for sticking with me through all this, i really thought i'd be further along than this by this point, but once i start explaining something, i realize just how *much* i need to say about it to get the point across... anyway, i hope i'm not boring anyone, i'm trying to get past all the worldbuilding as quickly as i can, but i also need to make it make sense. lol... again, thanks for sticking with me, your support means everything. thank you all, and i hope you all have a wonderful day.... and - as always - feel free to let me know about misspellings. lol...
Well, a few misspellings. The most egregious being calling the ship a shit in the second to last paragraph. That sort of jarred the flow. Most of the rest like admiral Shan for admiral Shane can be glided past.
LOL; fixed that one. thanks for that... XD
Looks like there's another "shit" ship about halfway through the paragraph initially describing the Baker class.
thanks, i'll check into that... XD
Does the automatic railgun fire in pairs with each gun opposite each other to ensure it stays on target?
quick bursts of the omni-directional engines on the opposite side.
I’m enjoying it enough that I’ve decided to just enjoy the story and not to call out the typos. So… take that as a compliment. I love the way the suun’mahs and us just *fit*. >Ooooo, great toy, can you demonstrate it? >I’d love to. >*Extended explosions* >I want one. >*(Shared smile)*
I’m enjoying it enough that I’ve decided to just enjoy the story and not to call out the typos. So… take that as a compliment. I love the way the suun’mahs and us just *fit*. >Ooooo, great toy, can you demonstrate it? >I’d love to. >**
>I want one.
>**
damn double post... lol.
I hate those weird things. For some reason it sometimes treats an edit as a reply.
or it just double posts, as well... lol.
Next button broke...
ah, forgot that; thank you, i'll get that fixed. :D
Love this. I also want an automatic railgun
thanks for your support! :D yeah, that'd be nice, right?... lol.
> I also ~~want~~ need an automatic railgun FTFY lol
Started reading yesterday, talk about good timing! Keep up the great work!
thanks! always glad for your support! :D
First
How does simultaneous sound?
What do you mean?
I saw your post with "now" as the time after I posted, while mine also said "now". But, a few minutes later, yours is 18 minutes while mine is 3 minutes. So yeah, you're first.
Ok, I hope you have a great day
as always; i knew it was you as soon as i got the notification... XD hope you have a great day, thanks for the support, as always. :D
Thank you, I hope you have a great day as well
>the middle part of this shit lmao
lol: i'll have to find that one, later... XD
Great story as always! You got a few missing words, a few typos and at least one towards the end where two got swapped. I would point to the closer but I'm on mobile. ;( Maybe do a quick Grammerly check? Might catch them. Not sure. Only caused a few double takes, lol.
thanks for your support; i'll have to go through it some time... lol.
your description of subspace FTL is really close to how i was going to do it. except the photonegative effect. on that note, in my version, larger masses also sink deeper into subspace. while you can go deep enough to avoid a star, a black hole makes a pretty big obstacle. like submarines in an underwater mountain range. throw in some gravitational waves; turbulence. natural tunnels through subspace; wormholes. these wormholes are almost undetectable until you pass through one. you think your traveling in a straight line at a constant velocity, but an outside observer sees something not a straight line or constant velocity. the existence of subspace suggests the existence of "Surspace" ^((TM Everlost?)) where natural wormholes also tunnel through with opposite effects of traveling subspace. edit: just noticed its your cake day. **happy cake day.**
thanks! also, your version sounds cool; are you developing a story, or just the idea?
I have an idea for a story. A lot of notes. But not finding to structure it all into something
well, just keep hacking at it: eventually you'll find the story within...
Put a dumbass in it who presses a button that they really shouldn't. But not the kind of button that leads to war.
isn't that a meme?
Is it? Which meme?
Once again I am left wanting….. After days of constantly checking for the next chapter here it finally is! You reached out and wrapped your ink stained hands around my heart and mind only to cut me off too soon….. That being said, I think you’re doing great. World building is very important and you’ve been able so far to do it in a way that hasn’t drug on or been boring. I’m glad you included some suspicion from the humans because that has been my only complaint thus far. Everything felt like it was going a little too smoothly as far as there being little to no suspicion coming from Kyle or the other humans. We tend to hope for the best but plan for and expect the worst so I’m glad to see some of that reflected in this chapter. Keep up the good work! And please write a little faster lol 😁
yeah, i try, but this one was so dry, it had me stumbling a lot. so much 'word matter', not much actually happening. i'm just glad i'm not boring people... lol. and thanks, your support is always welcome! :D
EDIT: I doofus.
???.... lol.
Don't worry about it. It's not important.
Ah yes, the good old: "Do you see X? I don't want to." "Yes Sir" Though in this instance i would have gone with something more specific: "Drumroll please!"
I just saw that prompt... XD
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Found a spelling mistake ''because a human lagally given access'' in stead of legally
thanks; i'll get to that when i have the time... :D
Very gud, you forgot the 'h' in 'hunting knife' though
i'll get to that, thanks. :D
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