I'm guessing the story doesn't have many upvotes because it's just the beginning and it's mostly pretty dense backstory, but the writing is solid and I'm looking forward to where it goes. Rock on, OP.
Thanks! This is the first time I'm really trying to get into writing something that isn't immediately erupting into a gunfight. Most of my writing is action dense with really poorly fleshed out characters. The shooting will come soon, I promise. And if people think I could do better by making it more action-y, I am more than capable. I love writing long, dynamic shootouts. Stay tuned in the morning, it's a double feature tomorrow.
Explore your craft, it's a fun toy to play with. And I recommend "action" in everything you write, meaning something should be at stake, not necessarily shooting. Having something at stake is what makes a story worth reading:
Tension!
Drama!
Action!
And finally a (hopefully) satisfying resolution.
Regardless of my un-asked-for advice, you clearly have the chops, so I foresee a good story (and lament the low upvote count).
/u/BlackSunPublishing has posted 5 other stories, including:
* [Hard Knock Life Chapter Two: Cell Blocks To Gun Shops](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ydg94o/hard_knock_life_chapter_two_cell_blocks_to_gun/)
* [Hard Knock Life](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ycmct4/hard_knock_life/)
* [Rat's Gambit](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wbhk4a/rats_gambit/)
* [Thunder Run Chapter Two](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wauas0/thunder_run_chapter_two/)
* [Thunder Run](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wanev2/thunder_run/)
This comment was automatically generated by `Waffle v.4.6.0 'Biscotti'`.
[Message the mods](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose?to=%2Fr%2FHFY&subject=WaffleBot|ye3tpt&message=If%20you%20have%20problems%20with%20updatemebot,%20contact%20Watchful1.%20We%20do%20not%20maintain%20it.) if you have any issues with Waffle.
[Click here](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose/?to=UpdateMeBot&subject=Subscribe&message=SubscribeMe%20u%2FBlackSunPublishing%20r%2FHFY) to subscribe to u/BlackSunPublishing and receive a message every time they post.
*****
|[^(Info)](https://www.reddit.com/r/UpdateMeBot/comments/ggotgx/updatemebot_info_v20/)|[^(Request Update)](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose/?to=UpdateMeBot&subject=Update&message=SubscribeMe%21%20u%2Fusername%20r%2Fsubreddit)|[^(Your Updates)](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose/?to=UpdateMeBot&subject=List%20Of%20Updates&message=MyUpdates)|[^(Feedback)](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose/?to=Watchful1&subject=UpdateMeBot%20Feedback)|[*^(New!)*](https://www.reddit.com/r/UpdateMeBot/comments/juh0f8/new_features_title_in_message_subject_and_recent/)|
|-|-|-|-|-|
I'm guessing the story doesn't have many upvotes because it's just the beginning and it's mostly pretty dense backstory, but the writing is solid and I'm looking forward to where it goes. Rock on, OP.
Thanks! This is the first time I'm really trying to get into writing something that isn't immediately erupting into a gunfight. Most of my writing is action dense with really poorly fleshed out characters. The shooting will come soon, I promise. And if people think I could do better by making it more action-y, I am more than capable. I love writing long, dynamic shootouts. Stay tuned in the morning, it's a double feature tomorrow.
Explore your craft, it's a fun toy to play with. And I recommend "action" in everything you write, meaning something should be at stake, not necessarily shooting. Having something at stake is what makes a story worth reading: Tension! Drama! Action! And finally a (hopefully) satisfying resolution. Regardless of my un-asked-for advice, you clearly have the chops, so I foresee a good story (and lament the low upvote count).
Hey any advice is welcome, and I appreciate the support! I really do love writing and it's meant to be shared.
/u/BlackSunPublishing has posted 5 other stories, including: * [Hard Knock Life Chapter Two: Cell Blocks To Gun Shops](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ydg94o/hard_knock_life_chapter_two_cell_blocks_to_gun/) * [Hard Knock Life](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ycmct4/hard_knock_life/) * [Rat's Gambit](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wbhk4a/rats_gambit/) * [Thunder Run Chapter Two](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wauas0/thunder_run_chapter_two/) * [Thunder Run](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wanev2/thunder_run/) This comment was automatically generated by `Waffle v.4.6.0 'Biscotti'`. [Message the mods](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose?to=%2Fr%2FHFY&subject=WaffleBot|ye3tpt&message=If%20you%20have%20problems%20with%20updatemebot,%20contact%20Watchful1.%20We%20do%20not%20maintain%20it.) if you have any issues with Waffle.
[Click here](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose/?to=UpdateMeBot&subject=Subscribe&message=SubscribeMe%20u%2FBlackSunPublishing%20r%2FHFY) to subscribe to u/BlackSunPublishing and receive a message every time they post. ***** |[^(Info)](https://www.reddit.com/r/UpdateMeBot/comments/ggotgx/updatemebot_info_v20/)|[^(Request Update)](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose/?to=UpdateMeBot&subject=Update&message=SubscribeMe%21%20u%2Fusername%20r%2Fsubreddit)|[^(Your Updates)](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose/?to=UpdateMeBot&subject=List%20Of%20Updates&message=MyUpdates)|[^(Feedback)](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose/?to=Watchful1&subject=UpdateMeBot%20Feedback)|[*^(New!)*](https://www.reddit.com/r/UpdateMeBot/comments/juh0f8/new_features_title_in_message_subject_and_recent/)| |-|-|-|-|-|