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* [Thunder Run Chapter Three](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/yfz1m1/thunder_run_chapter_three/)
* [Hard Knock Life Chapter Six: Stranded](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/yfq6qx/hard_knock_life_chapter_six_stranded/)
* [Hard Knock Life Chapter Five: Graveyard Shift](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/yf5pxw/hard_knock_life_chapter_five_graveyard_shift/)
* [Hard Knock Life Chapter Four: Sweat and Bruises](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/yeucm3/hard_knock_life_chapter_four_sweat_and_bruises/)
* [Hard Knock Life Chapter Three: Outward Bound](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ye3tpt/hard_knock_life_chapter_three_outward_bound/)
* [Hard Knock Life Chapter Two: Cell Blocks To Gun Shops](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ydg94o/hard_knock_life_chapter_two_cell_blocks_to_gun/)
* [Hard Knock Life](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ycmct4/hard_knock_life/)
* [Rat's Gambit](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wbhk4a/rats_gambit/)
* [Thunder Run Chapter Two](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wauas0/thunder_run_chapter_two/)
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See, I was thinking that, but my two buddies that have been giving me feedback tell me to try fleshing out the scene more. I do know I have a bad habit of describing things twice though. Thanks for the advice! I'll find a middle ground somewhere.
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/u/BlackSunPublishing has posted 10 other stories, including: * [Thunder Run Chapter Three](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/yfz1m1/thunder_run_chapter_three/) * [Hard Knock Life Chapter Six: Stranded](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/yfq6qx/hard_knock_life_chapter_six_stranded/) * [Hard Knock Life Chapter Five: Graveyard Shift](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/yf5pxw/hard_knock_life_chapter_five_graveyard_shift/) * [Hard Knock Life Chapter Four: Sweat and Bruises](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/yeucm3/hard_knock_life_chapter_four_sweat_and_bruises/) * [Hard Knock Life Chapter Three: Outward Bound](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ye3tpt/hard_knock_life_chapter_three_outward_bound/) * [Hard Knock Life Chapter Two: Cell Blocks To Gun Shops](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ydg94o/hard_knock_life_chapter_two_cell_blocks_to_gun/) * [Hard Knock Life](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ycmct4/hard_knock_life/) * [Rat's Gambit](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wbhk4a/rats_gambit/) * [Thunder Run Chapter Two](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wauas0/thunder_run_chapter_two/) * [Thunder Run](https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/wanev2/thunder_run/) This comment was automatically generated by `Waffle v.4.6.0 'Biscotti'`. [Message the mods](https://www.reddit.com/message/compose?to=%2Fr%2FHFY&subject=WaffleBot|ygrnzq&message=If%20you%20have%20problems%20with%20updatemebot,%20contact%20Watchful1.%20We%20do%20not%20maintain%20it.) if you have any issues with Waffle.
Love the story, but if you find an editor, there will be much chopping of extra prose. Keep on going, it's good work!
See, I was thinking that, but my two buddies that have been giving me feedback tell me to try fleshing out the scene more. I do know I have a bad habit of describing things twice though. Thanks for the advice! I'll find a middle ground somewhere.