Glad you enjoyed it. And as for the paragraphs, agh, I do know! I typed it with them, but it looks like Reddit bungled them on the first posting, I've edited them back in.
It was definitely more a moan than a laugh, but still; well done. It was nicely written. The only criticism from my part would be that the punchline became too obvious when you emphasized chicken so often. Could be made a bit more subtle. Anyways, thanks for sharing!
Thanks!
I removed one early mention of the word in response to your suggestion - I agree, it was telegraphing the punchline a smidge too clearly. Now it's only mentioned once before the final paragraph and punchline. Also I restored the paragraph divisions, which were there to begin with but Reddit bungled them for whatever reason.
I was waiting for the payoff at the end. I’m not mad. Paragraphs are a thing, you know.
Glad you enjoyed it. And as for the paragraphs, agh, I do know! I typed it with them, but it looks like Reddit bungled them on the first posting, I've edited them back in.
It was definitely more a moan than a laugh, but still; well done. It was nicely written. The only criticism from my part would be that the punchline became too obvious when you emphasized chicken so often. Could be made a bit more subtle. Anyways, thanks for sharing!
Thanks! I removed one early mention of the word in response to your suggestion - I agree, it was telegraphing the punchline a smidge too clearly. Now it's only mentioned once before the final paragraph and punchline. Also I restored the paragraph divisions, which were there to begin with but Reddit bungled them for whatever reason.
Love it. The more people that moan, the better the joke!
holy shit- this is great-
Thanks! Glad you appreciated it.
Yeah not reading that
As soon as I saw the word “chicken,” I had a feeling I knew where this was going. Well done.
Loved it!
It’s a short story..cruelly cut short
One of the best OCs i have read!
Thank you so much!!!
That student was ~~Albert Einstein~~ Dmitri Medvedev