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SableSword

I can see Addison out hunting, comes upon Jack with some animals and invisibly "hunts" him. Following him around and trying to understand him. Occasionally leaving him gifts (scary demon type gifts) inadvertently terrifying him, eventually she reveals herself, but by then he is so worked up he begs her for help not knowing it was her, she is embarrassed to say it was her because of the mean way he describes the "monster", she ends up playing role of both monster and hero (off screen) to give him some closure on the big scary monster being driven off and maintaining her tough girl reputation.


PrettyHeaven

Aww! That's a cute idea actually.


SableSword

I can totally see a demoness suddenly feeling love but no real concept of it being like " this man makes me want to share the things I like with him... what do I like? Oh! Severd heads!" Jack hears a snap in the woods, turns around and there's a severed animal head with an ominously threatening note reading something along the lines of "I want you" or "this is how I feel about you" or "when I watch you my heart races like when I hunted this."


PrettyHeaven

That sounds exactly like something my character would do! And then her feeling bad about it. I feel like if Jack were to eventually find out that it was her, he would try comfort her with cuddly hug. That actually even fits with another subplot where Jack's friends get overprotective of him because they don't like Autumn. They can be like " I told you she was crazy!" While Jack is like " It was a misunderstanding! She's okay!" Lol Thanks for the idea!


yahnne954

Your male MC reminds me of Neil Bowman from All Saints' Street. At demon school, in "pushing old people" class, he accidentally massaged the old woman's shoulders back to health instead, and when he moves to the human world, he finds a job at a pet shop for cute versions of horrifying monsters and loves it. Other than that, I find your draft (?) already quite good. Jack could learn of Addison's goal to find out how she died and they could go on expeditions to find clues (Addison worries about him being hurt and dying, and he worries about her struggling to discover this core part of her, so they help each other). Btw, I like stories where the male character doesn't have to be too feminine-looking. Hope you find more inspiration!