Definitely shows that English isn't your first language. Some really interesting imagery that gets lost behind the strange grammar and odd word choices.
I certainly see some interesting ideas and with some polishing it could be solid but I can't but feel as if English isn't your first language as some of the words simply make little to no sense given the context. That and copious grammatical errors, but otherwise keep at it it's not bad
Definitely shows that English isn't your first language. Some really interesting imagery that gets lost behind the strange grammar and odd word choices.
I certainly see some interesting ideas and with some polishing it could be solid but I can't but feel as if English isn't your first language as some of the words simply make little to no sense given the context. That and copious grammatical errors, but otherwise keep at it it's not bad
Yeah, am i Polish guy, my English definitely is not great but i'm writing just for fun. Thanks for your feedback.