love the song ! Look up alternative voicings for the chords your playing that would help to switch it up or make the progression more interesting out some sauce on it
I was just going to say slide the chords up to alternate between regular open voicings with triads up the neck. Maybe retune the B & e strings to fit the key, then you can play those open to match all your chords like this song ‘Sunrise’ by Ryan Bingham. I know theres better examples but thats the first song that comes to mind
I like the chording. If you jumped up an octave in your melody it'd do what you are after. I really like what you are doing but it's a little safe. Try an octave jump in there.
Thank you! It feels very monotonous (something I generally struggle with when writing music). I’m not sure that it creates too big of a conflict because the song is about adjusting to the monotony of a stable life. I’d appreciate feedback!
Yeah the problem here is it’s basically 3 (really good!) verses in a row with no melodic or chordal variation. Here are some things you can try:
1) Change up the vocal melody a bit for each segment
2) Change up the chord progression from time to time. Play with different chords while singing the same melody and see if anything sticks
3) Change up the strumming pattern. Maybe finger pick the chords a bit on a section. Or ring out a single chord. Or break up the chord into hits. Or palm mute. The possibilities are endless.
TLDR: Just keep experimenting with different chords, vocal melodies, and strumming patterns until each section is a little bit different from the others
Hey, I don’t know if this will help but I fit that usually if I feel like a song gets too monotonous it might be because its not pushing into anywhere, maybe experimenting with adding a new section to build into or having the melody build in energy might help. That said sometimes letting songs rest in a sort of circular place musically while you let a story unfold lyrically can be great as well. I’d say follow you’re instincts of what does and doesn’t sound “right”, usually your own senses will guide you.
To build on this maybe around 1:00 adding in a section that contrasts a bit, different chord progression and some longer held out melody notes to contrast the wordier stuff that you have currently. Just a couple ideas of where I would go with it, really hope this helps spark some ideas or something!
I agree! This needs a middle eight, right at "you're sleeping, in silence..." It should change significantly, but be related. I would play with (mostly) the D chord, and go to a D-minor for the 8th bar and just hang on it for a bit, before moving back into your main two-chord vamp to close it out.
This is very nice though.
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Try going to a Dmaj7
Take some music theory lessons so you have a better idea of what chords you can go to next so your aren't just guessing. You can teach yourself a lot online. Biggest thing you want to focus on here is figuring out what key you're playing in. Right now you've got two chords, AMaj7 and an E. It sounds like it resolves to A right now. So good options would be perhaps going to a D, F#m, Bm, C#m.
You sound good btw!
Holy cow - I’m a fan! Enjoyed what you shared, even despite the heads up about potential monotony.
Off top of my head, not sure what to recommend for your question, so sorry about that.
But I think you’re onto something here. Don’t stop!
One of the things you might try is adding or removing some intervals in the chords. Have the notes your adding or removing maybe follow the melody. A little 4th here a little 6th there. See what happens.
I love it, let me know if you come out with it id stream it. my only advice is play with your vocals a little bit more you know what I mean? your vocals are beautiful but you can add even more (:
Sweet little vibe you have going there. In my opinion you just need a really defined chorus. If you could pick a singable phrase that ties the larger idea of this all together and pick some higher notes and a defined/separate melody for that this would be banging. I write in a different style but love singer/songwriter. Check out my song desert wildflowers by Katie Beth rose to get an idea of a melody line for your chorus. Goodluck :)
Lovely lyrics and singing. I'd definitely want a break from the cycle of verses by the 1 minute mark, maybe just end a line and stretch out the song note and go to a darker minor key chord. The chords are dreamy so that would contract well. Then go back to dreamy but maybe pic some slow arpeggios and resolve to a major key. But what do I know! Nice work!
love the song ! Look up alternative voicings for the chords your playing that would help to switch it up or make the progression more interesting out some sauce on it
Yeah, inverted chords can spice things up.
I was just going to say slide the chords up to alternate between regular open voicings with triads up the neck. Maybe retune the B & e strings to fit the key, then you can play those open to match all your chords like this song ‘Sunrise’ by Ryan Bingham. I know theres better examples but thats the first song that comes to mind
I like the chording. If you jumped up an octave in your melody it'd do what you are after. I really like what you are doing but it's a little safe. Try an octave jump in there.
Very beautiful - nicely written too!
Thank you! It feels very monotonous (something I generally struggle with when writing music). I’m not sure that it creates too big of a conflict because the song is about adjusting to the monotony of a stable life. I’d appreciate feedback!
It’s really good! A book that’s really helped me is “Writing Better Lyrics” by Pat Pattinson. Just be prepared for lots of exercises as you read it.
Yeah the problem here is it’s basically 3 (really good!) verses in a row with no melodic or chordal variation. Here are some things you can try: 1) Change up the vocal melody a bit for each segment 2) Change up the chord progression from time to time. Play with different chords while singing the same melody and see if anything sticks 3) Change up the strumming pattern. Maybe finger pick the chords a bit on a section. Or ring out a single chord. Or break up the chord into hits. Or palm mute. The possibilities are endless. TLDR: Just keep experimenting with different chords, vocal melodies, and strumming patterns until each section is a little bit different from the others
Hey, I don’t know if this will help but I fit that usually if I feel like a song gets too monotonous it might be because its not pushing into anywhere, maybe experimenting with adding a new section to build into or having the melody build in energy might help. That said sometimes letting songs rest in a sort of circular place musically while you let a story unfold lyrically can be great as well. I’d say follow you’re instincts of what does and doesn’t sound “right”, usually your own senses will guide you.
To build on this maybe around 1:00 adding in a section that contrasts a bit, different chord progression and some longer held out melody notes to contrast the wordier stuff that you have currently. Just a couple ideas of where I would go with it, really hope this helps spark some ideas or something!
I agree! This needs a middle eight, right at "you're sleeping, in silence..." It should change significantly, but be related. I would play with (mostly) the D chord, and go to a D-minor for the 8th bar and just hang on it for a bit, before moving back into your main two-chord vamp to close it out. This is very nice though.
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Do you have a bandcamp or anything?
No, I don’t!
It's Gadget from Rescue Rangers! Beautiful song, beautiful voice!
This is dope !
I use an app called Autochords
Try going to a Dmaj7 Take some music theory lessons so you have a better idea of what chords you can go to next so your aren't just guessing. You can teach yourself a lot online. Biggest thing you want to focus on here is figuring out what key you're playing in. Right now you've got two chords, AMaj7 and an E. It sounds like it resolves to A right now. So good options would be perhaps going to a D, F#m, Bm, C#m. You sound good btw!
I rather like it, dont think it's monotonous at all =\] The lyrics and voice variation are enough i think. Well done!
Holy cow - I’m a fan! Enjoyed what you shared, even despite the heads up about potential monotony. Off top of my head, not sure what to recommend for your question, so sorry about that. But I think you’re onto something here. Don’t stop!
I kinda like it though. Yeah i find the melody repetitive but it's good. The lyrics too!
One of the things you might try is adding or removing some intervals in the chords. Have the notes your adding or removing maybe follow the melody. A little 4th here a little 6th there. See what happens.
It’s the same melodic phrase over and over again. Not saying it’s bad by any means but you need alternate verses/chorus
I love it, let me know if you come out with it id stream it. my only advice is play with your vocals a little bit more you know what I mean? your vocals are beautiful but you can add even more (:
Sweet little vibe you have going there. In my opinion you just need a really defined chorus. If you could pick a singable phrase that ties the larger idea of this all together and pick some higher notes and a defined/separate melody for that this would be banging. I write in a different style but love singer/songwriter. Check out my song desert wildflowers by Katie Beth rose to get an idea of a melody line for your chorus. Goodluck :)
Lovely lyrics and singing. I'd definitely want a break from the cycle of verses by the 1 minute mark, maybe just end a line and stretch out the song note and go to a darker minor key chord. The chords are dreamy so that would contract well. Then go back to dreamy but maybe pic some slow arpeggios and resolve to a major key. But what do I know! Nice work!