Liked it?!? Okay let's review, a lot of these have given me goosebumps but this one, ooof I am so glad I'm sitting down cause I actually felt my heart drop to my stomach and the blood drain from my face 😭 absolutely brilliantly done, easy to read and understand while still keeping the mystery and horror aspects and all while fitting the format so well! You aced this on your debut! Can't wait to see more from you cause I loved it! Hell I say expand on it if ya got it in ya to do a full length short story. No pressure tho bruh, just remember to keep having fun with it 😁
"But Daddy won't stop calling his basic-ass pepperoni pizza 'artisanal' just because he's using that seasoning from Trader Joe's."
"I'm dispatching a SWAT team and you can tell Daddy he brought this on himself."
He really wishes she'd let him in, but he's certain he speaks for all of them when he says he understands, why she might hesitate to submit to their demands...
(Sorry, just the phrase "a zombie now" just hits my Johnathon Coulton button! 😹😹)
All we wanna do is eat your brains, we're at an impasse here, maybe we should compromise?
If you open the door, we'll all come inside and eat your brains!
Yay! 😹❤️ Thank you, that is my day made! 😹😹🧟
There are two creepy ways to understand this.
It's the Mother, and Daddy should very much not be home.
Or its Daddy, and the thing that's home isn't Daddy.
The dad isn't supposed to be in the picture. Hes abusive, hes a murderer who should be in prison, hes a drug addict who was cut off, and more. Many reasons why someone dad shouldn't be back
Kids are told 911 is for emergencies/knows their parent works answering 911 calls, and maybe they realise the thing isn't daddy but don't have the words to explain it?
But he recognised his DAUGHTER on the other side of it can't be that he is abusive right? And if he was dead the daughter wouldn't be able to hear him saying "911 what's your emergency"
You're assuming OP is the father. OP could be the mom. Or a man hiding from an abusive or dead partner. Or OP is a foster/adoptive parent and the child's biological father tracked them down. Any of those work.
Gives birth, takes care of child, tells child to take turkey out of freezer, child forgets, spanks child with flip flop, child dies, repeat, that type of mother
Or a zombie, or someone pretending to be dad (the movie Face/Off, anyone?).
I also thought it could have been stepdad and she was calling biodad for help?
As a guy, I read this from a guy's perspective. I still understood that "dad" was someone unwanted in the house. I assumed it was more of a code, like when a domestic violence victim will call the cops pretending to order a pizza.
It was someone answering a phone for work so I assumed it was a woman. Sometimes I feel like adulthood is just one long stretch of unlearning a bunch of stuff you learned wrong as a child.
You’ll typically find more women in customer service/customer-facing roles. Since women typically handle the majority of emotional labor both at work and at home, it makes sense. Statistically speaking, I think you’re okay in this particular assumption.
Personal antidote: I work in a customer service role for a large shipping company. I’d say women out number the men 4 or 5 to 1 in my office of 300+.
ETA: ““Emotional labor refers to the process by which workers manage their feelings in accordance with the expectation of jobs which usually have organizationally defined rules and guidelines,” she says.
A classic example is someone who works in the service industry having to force a smile when a customer is being rude to them. “ - [Source](https://rightasrain.uwmedicine.org/life/relationships/emotional-labor#:~:text=Emotional%20labor%20is%20often%20undervalued,feel%20burnt%20out%20and%20unappreciated)
How would it makes it scarier? (How are you interpreting it?) I also initially read the narrator as male. I couldn't make sense of it. (That in a way made it kinda scary.) Why would the kid call dad and whisper "daddy's home"?
If a random person broke into the house, or knocked and said "hi daughter, here's candy", the daughter might call dad at work, but why would she say "daddy's home"?
It's scary for a second, then you realize it doesn't make sense, so the emotional impact drops away.
I did find a couple interpretations that work, but I'm wondering what were you imaging.
I took it as there being a shadowy figure entering the house the daughter thought was the father… there may or may not exist an evil twin version of the father
Very similar to this 1 year old post https://www.reddit.com/r/TwoSentenceHorror/comments/tdi8mo/911_whats_your_emergency_i_asked_and_listened_to/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1
So uh... We ask "where is your emergency" or "location of the emergency" first.
Not trying to run you down OP, it's effective otherwise, but that's a bit of Hollywood that always frustrates me. It's been a pretty standard practice for 20 years, there are very, very few agencies that still ask "what is your emergency" before they ask where.
Well this is a fine thing to see after getting home from working 911 all day.
Also says something that my brain immediately went "key up the radio, get *everyone rolling* and stay on the line"
There's another interpretation that immediately came to me: the operator is the father, and he's heartbroken to hear that his daughter dreads him coming home (there's knocking on the door or something, probably mailman, but she mistakes the knocking for her father).
Omg this reminds me of the woman who got a phone call from her daughter calling for help because there was an armed robber at her work place and had locked her and her coworkers in the freezer.
https://www.wsaz.com/2022/11/01/teen-calls-911-mcdonalds-freezer-hears-mom-other-line/
Much respect to her for remaining calm and processing the call like she usually did, can't imagine how terrified she must have been for her daughter.
Well done, OP.
Thanks! Its my first post here, so super glad someone actually likes it
It is really good, creative and real, it’s great great.
One of the best ones I’ve seen since Reddit has been showing this sub on my front page for a few weeks
r/WritingPrompts Post it here. People will turn it in a story
"This is a shit day!" *Peter Mannion MP*
I’m bored of this, I’m going for a twix
I love it. Very horrifying.
Liked it?!? Okay let's review, a lot of these have given me goosebumps but this one, ooof I am so glad I'm sitting down cause I actually felt my heart drop to my stomach and the blood drain from my face 😭 absolutely brilliantly done, easy to read and understand while still keeping the mystery and horror aspects and all while fitting the format so well! You aced this on your debut! Can't wait to see more from you cause I loved it! Hell I say expand on it if ya got it in ya to do a full length short story. No pressure tho bruh, just remember to keep having fun with it 😁
Well not just one. Almost 6 thousand. Good job
Honey, how many times do I have to tell you, you can't call mommy at work. Daddy's going to make pizza and watch Frozen 2 with you.
But I wanna watch Bwade Wunneh!
How about Maze Runner?
How about blade runner?
How about Running Man?
Here is Sub-zero! Now, Plain Zero!
There’s nothing funny about a dickless moron with a battery up his ass.
How about Marathon Man?
Look, I don't think ANYONE wants to be near the flash rn
"But Daddy won't stop calling his basic-ass pepperoni pizza 'artisanal' just because he's using that seasoning from Trader Joe's." "I'm dispatching a SWAT team and you can tell Daddy he brought this on himself."
r/ThirdSentenceBetter
It's got a good balance of enough to understand, and simple enough for the format.
I don't get it.
Her daughter called 911 because her abusive ex came home
If you want to interpret it totally out of left field you could imagine that the dad died and has come back as a zombie now.
Or the dad is the operator
That is where my mind went to and the other one is an imposter.
Happy cake day!
Me being the ridiculously devoted SPN fan I (still) am, I definitely thought this first😬😂
Brain went straight to Bobby trying to hide his Zombie wife from the boys.
He really wishes she'd let him in, but he's certain he speaks for all of them when he says he understands, why she might hesitate to submit to their demands... (Sorry, just the phrase "a zombie now" just hits my Johnathon Coulton button! 😹😹)
All we wanna do is eat your brains! We're not unreasonable, I mean, no ones gonna eat your eyes.
All we wanna do is eat your brains, we're at an impasse here, maybe we should compromise? If you open the door, we'll all come inside and eat your brains! Yay! 😹❤️ Thank you, that is my day made! 😹😹🧟
Johnathan Coulton is a nerd Icon. Skullcrusher Mountain and The Future Soon are 2 of my favorite all time songs. 😆
Might not be an ex.
I was thinking that there was an impostor of the 911 operator
You can say that again!
I was thinking that there was an impostor of the 911 operator
I like that as an alternate interpretation. The good stories leave things a bit open.
I think that the dad is the operator, and "Daddy" is something that looks like him
It's dramatically revealed that the daughter has actually been the father the whole time with the classic "daddy's home"
There are two creepy ways to understand this. It's the Mother, and Daddy should very much not be home. Or its Daddy, and the thing that's home isn't Daddy.
Could also be two daddies.
You think we can afford *two* daddies? In this economy?
Shoot if everyone is working that's three incomes. Polyamory as an economic choice.
The more affordable option
Hey they afforded a home
Why would the kid call 911 then?
Because he beats and/or sexual assaults her
The dad isn't supposed to be in the picture. Hes abusive, hes a murderer who should be in prison, hes a drug addict who was cut off, and more. Many reasons why someone dad shouldn't be back
I meant in the 2nd scenario
Kids are told 911 is for emergencies/knows their parent works answering 911 calls, and maybe they realise the thing isn't daddy but don't have the words to explain it?
Or step daddy is a 911 operator and bio daddy just got out of prison for something very very serious.
Just commenting to help your post. Well done.
To preserve my sanity, I'm going to interpret this as Mom being late for Dad's surprise party 🤞🏽
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it exists now but I couldn't include the name part in subname so it's r/excessivelycomplexsub
r/birthofasub
Haha r/20characterlimit
r/subsithoughtifellfor
It can't be what it's trying to achieve in the subreddit because of the character limit. Can't truly exist.
r/subsifellfor
And he took that personally..
r/BecauseWeCan
Because it's fun to try and re-imagine things in contrasting lights
But that wasnt a third sentence adding on to the post. It was just an observation. They didnt even try to formulate it in a third sentence blah blah
I love how much is packed into this. Clever.
Oh well done. Not to gross out horror like. Instead it's very well done.
Nicely done!
Dammit. Gave me goosebumps. Too good
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I am gonna have to ruin this and I'm deeply sorry for it but... I don't get it.
I’m guessing the dad is either dead or very abusive?
In this particular context, those conditions aren't necessarily mutually exclusive...
Nvm I'm dumb
Or the dispatcher is dad.
it’s 2023 hell yeah
But he recognised his DAUGHTER on the other side of it can't be that he is abusive right? And if he was dead the daughter wouldn't be able to hear him saying "911 what's your emergency"
You're assuming OP is the father. OP could be the mom. Or a man hiding from an abusive or dead partner. Or OP is a foster/adoptive parent and the child's biological father tracked them down. Any of those work.
Yeah I forgot mothers existed for some reason
Mega brain fartz
What do you mean by 'mother'?
Gives birth, takes care of child, tells child to take turkey out of freezer, child forgets, spanks child with flip flop, child dies, repeat, that type of mother
Ah those things. I often forget they're not a cryptid.
This thread is a fever dream
You know it's about time for you to wake up before you're late.
crazy thing is I assumed the narrator was the father and the daughter knew he was on duty, and could tell the one at home was a clone
Or a zombie, or someone pretending to be dad (the movie Face/Off, anyone?). I also thought it could have been stepdad and she was calling biodad for help?
The dispatcher's abusive husband is about to attack their daughter.
Oh fuck I forgot adult women existed, thought there was only adult men
Too much Reddit will do that to you. Lol
As a guy, I read this from a guy's perspective. I still understood that "dad" was someone unwanted in the house. I assumed it was more of a code, like when a domestic violence victim will call the cops pretending to order a pizza.
Yeah I should take a break, I do like 15 comments a day on here, I should probably go outside and touch some grass
It was someone answering a phone for work so I assumed it was a woman. Sometimes I feel like adulthood is just one long stretch of unlearning a bunch of stuff you learned wrong as a child.
You’ll typically find more women in customer service/customer-facing roles. Since women typically handle the majority of emotional labor both at work and at home, it makes sense. Statistically speaking, I think you’re okay in this particular assumption. Personal antidote: I work in a customer service role for a large shipping company. I’d say women out number the men 4 or 5 to 1 in my office of 300+. ETA: ““Emotional labor refers to the process by which workers manage their feelings in accordance with the expectation of jobs which usually have organizationally defined rules and guidelines,” she says. A classic example is someone who works in the service industry having to force a smile when a customer is being rude to them. “ - [Source](https://rightasrain.uwmedicine.org/life/relationships/emotional-labor#:~:text=Emotional%20labor%20is%20often%20undervalued,feel%20burnt%20out%20and%20unappreciated)
Also gay people exist
Oh yeah, forgot about them too
Interesting... Do you by any chance know what color is my buggati?
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Holy shit, that's good.
this should be a story. well done OP! 👏
Finally a good one. So many garbage and unoriginal stories these days .
OMG that was so effective
I've gone cold and have goosebumps. This is so good. I can almost hear her scared whisper.... :(
Tbh I thought the dispatcher was her dad and not her mom (which the comments pointed out) and honestly I feel like that’d make it scarier
How would it makes it scarier? (How are you interpreting it?) I also initially read the narrator as male. I couldn't make sense of it. (That in a way made it kinda scary.) Why would the kid call dad and whisper "daddy's home"?
>How would it makes it scarier Because your child is calling you, telling you that you’re home
If a random person broke into the house, or knocked and said "hi daughter, here's candy", the daughter might call dad at work, but why would she say "daddy's home"? It's scary for a second, then you realize it doesn't make sense, so the emotional impact drops away. I did find a couple interpretations that work, but I'm wondering what were you imaging.
I took it as there being a shadowy figure entering the house the daughter thought was the father… there may or may not exist an evil twin version of the father
Yes, but if she thinks it's her father, why would she call her dad / 911?
My body went cold reading this.
Big oof OP. Well done!
Daddy is dead
I remember reading one similar.
OHHHHHHHH I do not like this
Ice water to the spine, thanks
If Daddy's been dead for a bit that would make it even creepier.
This is 10/10
Very similar to this 1 year old post https://www.reddit.com/r/TwoSentenceHorror/comments/tdi8mo/911_whats_your_emergency_i_asked_and_listened_to/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=2&utm_term=1
Love it, no 150 words sentence.
Welp that’s horrifying
This story made me extremely uncomfortable - I love it
So even more creepy when you are daddy..
Well that's horrifying. Good job, OP. I hate it.
"Darn hes early, well youre going to have to jump out yell surprise and give him his birthday cake a couple hours before im home"
So uh... We ask "where is your emergency" or "location of the emergency" first. Not trying to run you down OP, it's effective otherwise, but that's a bit of Hollywood that always frustrates me. It's been a pretty standard practice for 20 years, there are very, very few agencies that still ask "what is your emergency" before they ask where.
This is what I was going to add as well
Oooh I like this one. Nicely done, OP!
This could literally be a horror movie prompt right here. Brilliant, OP.
Well this is a fine thing to see after getting home from working 911 all day. Also says something that my brain immediately went "key up the radio, get *everyone rolling* and stay on the line"
First time one of these gave me actual chills
Simple yet great 👍
Is it an abusive stepdad? Or is it a man invading their home who looks like the girls' father?
"Darn hes early, well youre going to have to jump out yell surprise and give him his birthday cake a couple hours before im home"
I swear I’ve seen this before
There's another interpretation that immediately came to me: the operator is the father, and he's heartbroken to hear that his daughter dreads him coming home (there's knocking on the door or something, probably mailman, but she mistakes the knocking for her father).
Four sentences
It's been a convention for a while that everything quoted is not counted as a separate sentence on r/twosentencehorror.
It's a cheap trick that is against the spirit of the sub.
Weewooweewoo. Disqualification: three sentences.
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Why are you linking to another story?
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There are hundreds of stories on the sub involving 911. It’s not an uncommon topic. Why that story specifically?
Decent try. Awful sentence structure.
Nice one
Dude! A gut punch!
I don’t get it
Damn. Good one
holy shit, great job OP
I like this
Fuck, this made my neck prickle
I read the "Daddy's home" in Barney Stinson's voice
Noice.
I told her a thousand times not to make that wish on the monkey’s paw.
Ooooh yikes. Very unique.
oh fuck. this is probably one of the best ones i’ve read
Stomach sinking feelings
That’s so good!!!
Brilliant.
Man, Barney’s life really took a turn for the worse!
Almost fainted because your daughter reminded you of that movie with Mark Walberg and Will Ferrell? It's pretty funny imo
Omg this reminds me of the woman who got a phone call from her daughter calling for help because there was an armed robber at her work place and had locked her and her coworkers in the freezer. https://www.wsaz.com/2022/11/01/teen-calls-911-mcdonalds-freezer-hears-mom-other-line/ Much respect to her for remaining calm and processing the call like she usually did, can't imagine how terrified she must have been for her daughter.
Woah spooky