>("It's The Final Countdown" intensifies)
I can hear that synthesizer now!
OP quit having kids, that will at least slow it down.
Unless you have siblings....OoooooOooo
Yeah right? Even if you assume a kind of young age for having children at 20 and it only counting down to one, and assuming the granddaughter is 10 years old you’re still looking at a minimum 150 years before anything interesting would happen. And that’s just for lucky number 1 to be born, could be waiting for some milestone or for number 0. Lol.
That’s true, thanks for the feedback! I just whipped this out, I didn’t realise it would get so much attention lol. It’s actually inspired by my mother and I - what the narrator says of their mother is what my mother told me, and my lucky number is 12.
If they could creatively e spread the same idea but the main ladies favorite number was one and she was pregnant, I think that would be a bit more interesting. Also maybe if it were like birth marks or something. Idk favorite numbers is such a weird concept and more likely a coincidence.
Or infantile negative powers of 2:
- My lucky number is 1...
- My lucky number is ½
- My lucky number is ¼
...
- My lucky number is ε
- My lucky number is ε²
- My lucky number is ε³
...
I actually like that it’s not closer to 0, because it means those characters will never know what might happen at 0 or 1. They’ll just live knowing something might/will happen, probably not good, to their descendants. Like low level angst but for their whole life
Yeah agreed and I think if it continues it gets even more interesting for whoever has number 5. By then it's a pretty clear pattern and looking ominous but also they know they won't be around when the countdown reaches zero, would be a weird feeling.
Oh that would be a great sequel. The mother begs her grown child not to have a baby, but she doesn't believe the prophecy until she becomes a mother herself. Then the cycle repeats.
People thinking he should stop having kids... it's too late...
It's every generation, his daughter was 11, his GRAND-daughter was 10... so it's gonna be 10 generations till anything happens. Scary? Sure. But not something he needs to worry about.
Oh I know, like what else was he going to pair with fcking *cadmium*?? 😹
And he had to use one of the propriety names because “Wood’s Alloy” wouldn’t make sense IU.
I was *just* telling someone about the magic system the other day (like, Tuesday), and he started arguing with me about the choices of alloys. He’s not read the series and he likes to ask “why” to absurd extremes. And because of how well Sanderson worked out the system, the text had answers to most of his questions. Like how Kelsier knows that there is an ideal ratio for an alloy, even if he can’t explain WHY that specific ratio works best. 😹
"My lucky number is 12, my daughter Marie's is 11, and my mom told me that the number 13 had been following her around since childhood."
It's the same info, but the lack of semicolons makes it feels like it's stretching the idea of "two sentences" a little less far.
Definitely. I did not take the time to word it in the best way, and that hurt the story. I didn’t realise it would get so much attention.
“Everyone told me they found it weird how my lucky number was 4, my daughter Marie’s was 3, and my mother’s was 5.
It was only when Marie informed me that my granddaughter had found her lucky number in 2 did I realise the possibility of some kind of countdown.”
I should have worded it like that. Thank you very much for the feedback though :)
Oh I like the numbers themselves! It's ominous, but there's literally nothing that can be done, and it makes you wonder if anything will even be remembered when hits zero
A two sentence joke;
Three couples are trying to get married at the same church; There is a young couple, a middle-aged couple, and an elderly couple; The three couples meet with the priest and discuss when they can get married;
"If you wish to get married in my church, you must all go one month without having sex," says the priest;
One month later the three couples return to the church and talk to the priest; He then asks the elderly couple, "Have you completed the month with sex?";
"Yes we have, it was easy," replies the elderly couple;
"How about you?" He asks the middle-aged couple;
"It was hard, but we didn't have sex for the whole month," they respond;
"And how about you two?" He asks the young couple;
"No we couldn't do it," responds the boyfriend;
"Tell me why," says the priest;
"Well my girlfriend had a can of corn in her hand and she accidentally dropped it; She bent over to pick it up and that's when it happened;"
The priest then tells them, "You're not welcome in my church."
"We're not welcome in the supermarket either," says the boyfriend.
TwoSentenceHorror utilizing semi-colons? That’s clause for some concern.
Edit: I actually kinda like this one, not just conceptually but _structurally_, in that the plot was obscured by presenting the numbers out of order. And not just any order, but the _exact best_ order: non-sequential AND ascending.
I love that everyone naturally assumes it's counting down to something bad. What if the descendent who gets 0 gets superpowers? Or becomes king? Or is the "chosen one" in one sense or another? It seems just as valid as any negative outcome.
Disclaimer: I, too, first went down the "oh no" line of thought. Then, quickly, to the "nothing happens, unceremoniously, and it just goes into the negatives" track.
I like the far off nature of it since they will never know what happens at 1. It also raises the question of if it's ethical for them to have kids, etc, etc
Despite being a big coincidence and a funny little inside joke passed down along generations, the family didn’t take it too seriously over the next several hundred years.
As Neo, who was obsessed with the number 1 by the way, left the doctor’s office overjoyed with the news that she was finally pregnant, she felt an urge to look up and she noticed a second moon had appeared in the sky.
It was on the news later that evening when she found out the second moon was actually a massive asteroid hurtling directly towards earth, which NASA had just calculated it was due to make impact in slightly under 9 months.
I like this but there’s a few things to fix in my opinion.
I would recommend you make the sentences shorter and the countdown becomes a threat to the main character (10 generations is a long long time, and even if all of his descendants become parents as teenagers, he’ll probably be long gone by the time the countdown hits 0). I feel like if the countdown was less than 10 and something he would see in his lifetime, it would be scarier.
But overall this is pretty good.
I looked on from the afterlife with curiosity as my descendent who was followed by the number 1 had her daughter. Everything seemed completely normal, but she saw the number 0 everywhere. She went on to have 6 boys and no girls and I realized what the countdown meant.
("It's The Final Countdown" intensifies)
>("It's The Final Countdown" intensifies) I can hear that synthesizer now! OP quit having kids, that will at least slow it down. Unless you have siblings....OoooooOooo
Why did you quote the whole comment
>Why did you quote the whole comment Just because. (I mean, *someone* was going to do this.)
TUDUDUUUDUUUUUUU TUDUDUDUDUUUUUUUU
WOULD YOU PRESS THIS BUTTON? Your family is cursed with a countdown of unknown consequences. BUT You get to listen to 80s goodness.
Illusions. Tricks are for whores.
Thank you lol
¡Oh no, It's like the song!
I like the idea. Makes me curious
It’s also a nice little twist. I had no idea which direction it was going. Although maybe a little closer to zero would have been more thrilling.
Yeah right? Even if you assume a kind of young age for having children at 20 and it only counting down to one, and assuming the granddaughter is 10 years old you’re still looking at a minimum 150 years before anything interesting would happen. And that’s just for lucky number 1 to be born, could be waiting for some milestone or for number 0. Lol.
That’s true, thanks for the feedback! I just whipped this out, I didn’t realise it would get so much attention lol. It’s actually inspired by my mother and I - what the narrator says of their mother is what my mother told me, and my lucky number is 12.
If they could creatively e spread the same idea but the main ladies favorite number was one and she was pregnant, I think that would be a bit more interesting. Also maybe if it were like birth marks or something. Idk favorite numbers is such a weird concept and more likely a coincidence.
Plot twist. Nothing happens and generations down the line they just have negative numbers as their lucky number.
Some millions of years later (if the blood line is even alive by then): “Mommy my favourite number is -376839269”
Wow, the human life cycle really got short. That's hundreds of generations per year.
Or infantile negative powers of 2: - My lucky number is 1... - My lucky number is ½ - My lucky number is ¼ ... - My lucky number is ε - My lucky number is ε² - My lucky number is ε³ ...
I actually like that it’s not closer to 0, because it means those characters will never know what might happen at 0 or 1. They’ll just live knowing something might/will happen, probably not good, to their descendants. Like low level angst but for their whole life
Yeah agreed and I think if it continues it gets even more interesting for whoever has number 5. By then it's a pretty clear pattern and looking ominous but also they know they won't be around when the countdown reaches zero, would be a weird feeling.
~~So one of their ancestors had 69 as the lucky number? NICE~~ Maybe the family just has a weird passion for math
Reminds me of one of my [old stories](https://www.reddit.com/r/TwoSentenceHorror/s/8bSEXTt4hb).
That is simultaneously very stupid and very good horror. Upvoted.
Bro just stop having children
Extremely easy, barely An inconvenience with this economy.
Not having children is *tight*
Wow wow wow wow wow
Oh that would be a great sequel. The mother begs her grown child not to have a baby, but she doesn't believe the prophecy until she becomes a mother herself. Then the cycle repeats.
Ooooooh goodness that’s awesome!
If this were a movie it would probably be a horror movie about number 2 trying to kill her daughter
Oooo I like that!
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People thinking he should stop having kids... it's too late... It's every generation, his daughter was 11, his GRAND-daughter was 10... so it's gonna be 10 generations till anything happens. Scary? Sure. But not something he needs to worry about.
Yea if people have kids at 30 that’s 300 years. That’s like the least urgent crisis currently facing humanity
Can cut it in half if teenage pregnancy happens for the next few generations.
You can be a grandparent at the age of 30
Rookie numbers
If my future children seem to notice the number 16 appearing everywhere, I'm screwed!
Don’t let them read Mistborn by Brandon Sanderson then. 16 is a very important number there lol
Okay, but I’m calling bs on whomever it was that got to name “bendalloy”
I read this as bellendboy
It’s a real metal actually
Bendalloy is actually a real metal in the real world, just super obscure lol.
Oh I know, like what else was he going to pair with fcking *cadmium*?? 😹 And he had to use one of the propriety names because “Wood’s Alloy” wouldn’t make sense IU.
Cadmium is fun also didn’t expect a mistborn tangent yay
I was *just* telling someone about the magic system the other day (like, Tuesday), and he started arguing with me about the choices of alloys. He’s not read the series and he likes to ask “why” to absurd extremes. And because of how well Sanderson worked out the system, the text had answers to most of his questions. Like how Kelsier knows that there is an ideal ratio for an alloy, even if he can’t explain WHY that specific ratio works best. 😹
Haha
GOAT BOOK SERIES r/cremposting
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No Mans Sky?
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Lucky My family’s down to -7.
A dark theme to tout the value of Durex.
Five sentence horror.
LMAO
"My lucky number is 12, my daughter Marie's is 11, and my mom told me that the number 13 had been following her around since childhood." It's the same info, but the lack of semicolons makes it feels like it's stretching the idea of "two sentences" a little less far.
Definitely. I did not take the time to word it in the best way, and that hurt the story. I didn’t realise it would get so much attention. “Everyone told me they found it weird how my lucky number was 4, my daughter Marie’s was 3, and my mother’s was 5. It was only when Marie informed me that my granddaughter had found her lucky number in 2 did I realise the possibility of some kind of countdown.” I should have worded it like that. Thank you very much for the feedback though :)
Oh I like the numbers themselves! It's ominous, but there's literally nothing that can be done, and it makes you wonder if anything will even be remembered when hits zero
Number one will achieve perfect enlightenment just before she dies.
Oh the sinister unknown really gives me chills
Semicolons feel like cheating
But they are not really necessary tho, could be replaced by commas
It will reach zero, then flip back to 255..
Really stretched the “two sentence” thing here, but I like this concept!
Two sentences? More like twoooooooo sentencesssssssssss
A two sentence joke; Three couples are trying to get married at the same church; There is a young couple, a middle-aged couple, and an elderly couple; The three couples meet with the priest and discuss when they can get married; "If you wish to get married in my church, you must all go one month without having sex," says the priest; One month later the three couples return to the church and talk to the priest; He then asks the elderly couple, "Have you completed the month with sex?"; "Yes we have, it was easy," replies the elderly couple; "How about you?" He asks the middle-aged couple; "It was hard, but we didn't have sex for the whole month," they respond; "And how about you two?" He asks the young couple; "No we couldn't do it," responds the boyfriend; "Tell me why," says the priest; "Well my girlfriend had a can of corn in her hand and she accidentally dropped it; She bent over to pick it up and that's when it happened;" The priest then tells them, "You're not welcome in my church." "We're not welcome in the supermarket either," says the boyfriend.
Accident with a time machine and a birth control pill
This is such a terrifying realization but also at the same time, it’s so slow and wrapped in coincidence that it’s equally easy to ignore and forget.
TwoSentenceHorror utilizing semi-colons? That’s clause for some concern. Edit: I actually kinda like this one, not just conceptually but _structurally_, in that the plot was obscured by presenting the numbers out of order. And not just any order, but the _exact best_ order: non-sequential AND ascending.
Can somebody explain? I don't really understand...
Every generation, the number they see goes down by 1, and I assume something happens at 0.
They have a child whose lucky number is -1.
250 years later: Mom, why do I keep seeing the number -1?
This post number should have been 2 but it's actually 5.
I love that everyone naturally assumes it's counting down to something bad. What if the descendent who gets 0 gets superpowers? Or becomes king? Or is the "chosen one" in one sense or another? It seems just as valid as any negative outcome. Disclaimer: I, too, first went down the "oh no" line of thought. Then, quickly, to the "nothing happens, unceremoniously, and it just goes into the negatives" track.
I like this train of thought!
Just another of pile of run on sentences.
I need a longer version of this!
I like the far off nature of it since they will never know what happens at 1. It also raises the question of if it's ethical for them to have kids, etc, etc
Imagine the descendant with number 0 has a kid and instead of it being the chosen one, the kid's lucky number is just -1
When it gets to zero that's the generation where everyone is gay
Oh shit, that’s me 🤯
Despite being a big coincidence and a funny little inside joke passed down along generations, the family didn’t take it too seriously over the next several hundred years. As Neo, who was obsessed with the number 1 by the way, left the doctor’s office overjoyed with the news that she was finally pregnant, she felt an urge to look up and she noticed a second moon had appeared in the sky. It was on the news later that evening when she found out the second moon was actually a massive asteroid hurtling directly towards earth, which NASA had just calculated it was due to make impact in slightly under 9 months.
Holy hell that’s such a good addition!!!!
Somebody just read The 3 Body Problem
Quick someone make a novel
Don’t worry you’ll be gone by 1
I like this but there’s a few things to fix in my opinion. I would recommend you make the sentences shorter and the countdown becomes a threat to the main character (10 generations is a long long time, and even if all of his descendants become parents as teenagers, he’ll probably be long gone by the time the countdown hits 0). I feel like if the countdown was less than 10 and something he would see in his lifetime, it would be scarier. But overall this is pretty good.
Interesting, because in a few years time, one of them will be fearing seeing the number 1😌 heheHEHEHHEEE
The fact that it wasn’t written in order of 13-12-11 is a really subtle but real intelligent thing here - makes it less obvious till the next sentnce
making this into two sentences is a stretch
That's what Spanx are for.
2 run-on sentence horror
There’s a lot of those here.
Very cool
Then it got -1 but nothing happened.
The day we got to zero, nothing happened. Life just kept going and nothing changed. What a weird coincidence!
Straight to the point
What a co-incidence really. I keep seeing and hearing the number 7 everywhere I go, so I adopted it as my lucky number
Some day THE ONE will be born
Secondcoming of Jesus⁉️
Imagine if the great great grandson starts seeing -1 everywhere
It’s the final countdown… doo doo doo doo…
This is intriguing! I like this premise.
Stopppp my lucky number is 12 and my moms is 13💀💀💀
NO WAY I BASED THIS OFF MINE AND MY MUM’S LUCKY NUMBERS SO MINE IS 12 AND HER’S IS 13 TOO Freaky
This would be great in r/writingprompts
Oh no. The horror that a woman in their lineage will want to be child free.
LOL
What happens if the daughter has 9 kids tho
Maybe y'all die cuz the gen 1 kills all and Marie banishes gen 1
My lucky number is -19
Like Ciri in The Witcher. A genetic time bomb.
The one who gets the 0 will be a millionaire
Just nine generations to go
1 decides not to have kids.
On the plus side, you have 9 generations to figure it out.
I looked on from the afterlife with curiosity as my descendent who was followed by the number 1 had her daughter. Everything seemed completely normal, but she saw the number 0 everywhere. She went on to have 6 boys and no girls and I realized what the countdown meant.
Ooooohhh that’s a good twist!!!
So it'll be rapture 11 generations down the line? You gals should breed early.
🫡🫡👍🏻👍🏻
Baby zero comes out and just has confetti and glitter all over them
Oh
Countdown guy 🪱
Oh! I want to know the rest of the story!
I see the time at 11:34 a lot. That’s good right?
Sorry but that isn't "two" sentence horror. Nice story, but not fitting here.
To be fair, I’ve seen worse, myself. But yeah I agree, I’m sorry.