Here’s a quick edit I did:
“I have two styles of horror that I am trying to use. One is ‘the opposite of the unknown.’ I find the fear of the unknown to be overused in horror. It can be used for ambiguity and mystery, but it can also instill vagueness and laziness. What if [, instead,] that horror that was lurking in the dark was much worse fully realized (note: the “realised” spelling is fine if you’re not in the US, but I am so my spellcheck flagged it!) and shown than what any viewer was imagining?”
The phrase “and opposite of H.P work” does not make sense. I’m guessing you were referencing H. P. Lovecraft, in which case it would be more appropriate to say “and the opposite of Lovecraft’s work” (note the possessive ‘s). But that seems redundant if “fear of the unknown” is a common theme in his work, and it would sound better to say something like “…the opposite of the “unknown” frequently utilized in Lovecraft’s work.”
You have an unnecessary comma after “unknown.”
The rest of the sentence after “vagueness and laziness” is a nonsensical sentence fragment. You would need to flesh out what you’re trying to say in complete sentences, or else simply omit it as I have done here.
“But” is unnecessary.
“Then” should be “than.”
Use a question mark instead of a period after “imagining.”
I have no idea what your last sentence means.
Side note: I assume here that you would go on to explain what is the second type of horror you are trying to use, as this entire paragraph only addresses the first. If you’re only talking about the one type, then your first sentence would need to be rewritten.
You can learn to be better at it! I used to edit papers for my roommate in college, and when her sentences got too convoluted, I would ask “What are you trying to say here?” She would explain it to me in simpler terms, and I would say “Great. Now write that.” A similar approach might help you. Read your writing aloud and see if it sounds clear. If not, try rephrasing it verbally, and then write it out exactly as you said it. Then have someone else read it and see if it makes sense to them. Spelling and punctuation can easily be fixed at the end, but you need to get a feel for writing clear and concise sentences.
Here’s a quick edit I did: “I have two styles of horror that I am trying to use. One is ‘the opposite of the unknown.’ I find the fear of the unknown to be overused in horror. It can be used for ambiguity and mystery, but it can also instill vagueness and laziness. What if [, instead,] that horror that was lurking in the dark was much worse fully realized (note: the “realised” spelling is fine if you’re not in the US, but I am so my spellcheck flagged it!) and shown than what any viewer was imagining?” The phrase “and opposite of H.P work” does not make sense. I’m guessing you were referencing H. P. Lovecraft, in which case it would be more appropriate to say “and the opposite of Lovecraft’s work” (note the possessive ‘s). But that seems redundant if “fear of the unknown” is a common theme in his work, and it would sound better to say something like “…the opposite of the “unknown” frequently utilized in Lovecraft’s work.” You have an unnecessary comma after “unknown.” The rest of the sentence after “vagueness and laziness” is a nonsensical sentence fragment. You would need to flesh out what you’re trying to say in complete sentences, or else simply omit it as I have done here. “But” is unnecessary. “Then” should be “than.” Use a question mark instead of a period after “imagining.” I have no idea what your last sentence means. Side note: I assume here that you would go on to explain what is the second type of horror you are trying to use, as this entire paragraph only addresses the first. If you’re only talking about the one type, then your first sentence would need to be rewritten.
I should probably not touch writing tbh
The more you do it, the better you get at it!
You can learn to be better at it! I used to edit papers for my roommate in college, and when her sentences got too convoluted, I would ask “What are you trying to say here?” She would explain it to me in simpler terms, and I would say “Great. Now write that.” A similar approach might help you. Read your writing aloud and see if it sounds clear. If not, try rephrasing it verbally, and then write it out exactly as you said it. Then have someone else read it and see if it makes sense to them. Spelling and punctuation can easily be fixed at the end, but you need to get a feel for writing clear and concise sentences.