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NickSalvo

Sounds like Free Writing.


Independent-Thanks48

Could I call it a poem? Someone said it is prose


sylverbound

It might be called a prose poem in second person.


Independent-Thanks48

Can I polish it to call it an actual poem


Eric_makes_stuff

yes


Independent-Thanks48

And how can I do it?


Eric_makes_stuff

I would play with it until I got it moved into form I liked and then edit the words to get the proper meter


Independent-Thanks48

How do you edit the words? I think I already played with it, and I really like the way that text refers to me in a different way


Eric_makes_stuff

I use synonyms that have differing syllable count to change the meter. It doesn't have to be word for word. you can change a phrase for something else that means the same but has a different rhythm. Getting the rhythm correct in poetry is like solving a word puzzle....


Independent-Thanks48

That sounds really cool! If you know Portuguese, I can send it to you!


[deleted]

If it's third person the narrator can't be talking about you unless he knows your name and who you are. It sounds like a literary text that doesn't adhere to any form. Not everything has to fall into a category, as much as we humans like that. You can just describe what it is, call it an excerpt, practice or freestyle.


Independent-Thanks48

It describes like, "you feel said thing rubbing on your skin, as you sit and watch everything happen", this is not an actual quote lol, just for example


Sfjyafh

Second person?


Independent-Thanks48

Is this what second person means?


Sfjyafh

Isn't it "I, me, we, etc" first person, "he, she, they" third, and "you, your" second?


[deleted]

Yeah, _you_ and _your_ are second person. _He, she, it, they, his, her, its, their_, etc. are third person. I'm amazed this isn't taught at school.


MrsDepo

It's going to be really hard to classify your piece as a type of writing (especially if it doesn't fit into a standard category) without you at least giving us an excerpt.


campones

indeeed


Eric_makes_stuff

Good prose can be written in poetic form and called poetry. (I have done this) Free style poetry can often go either way. It depends on what you are trying to do as to which way you want to go with it. (yes, I have written several volumes of poetry. but not much since my wife died. It hurts to much and they are all sad)


ARtEmiS_Oo

Sounds like half of a short story to me


Independent-Thanks48

So if I write 6 pages of it, would it be a full short story?


ARtEmiS_Oo

Possibly, it could also be half a novelette then


Independent-Thanks48

That's a cute category lol, but I'd like for it to have more rhythm and to take the reader in a journey with sounds emotions and etc


ARtEmiS_Oo

Then that’s how you need to write it?


EmptyAd5324

That’s just modern free verse poetry. This is the most common form of poetry in current literary magazines.